Thursday, May 11, 2006

on a teacher's desk
this still Autumn noon
photos of happy children...
through the window
a school dirge

6 Comments:

Blogger Aurora said...

If you had one more line, this would be a dynamite tanka.

1:49 PM  
Blogger Tim S said...

Thx Aurora, I'll have to try and think of another line!

11:00 PM  
Blogger Aurora said...

Maybe a seasonal reference? Perhaps something like this:

on a teacher's desk
this spring morning
photos of happy children....
through the window
a school dirge

1:21 PM  
Blogger Tim S said...

Yes! Good suggestion, I'll get thinking, thanks Aurora.

10:05 PM  
Blogger Tim S said...

I'm thinking:

on a teacher's desk
this still Autumn noon
photos of happy children...
through the window
a school dirge

10:12 PM  
Blogger Aurora said...

I think that sounds good.:)

8:51 PM  

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